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In Love

She stood alone
beside the grave
her face so cold and still.

The first snowflake
fell to the ground
unbeknownst to her.

One year had passed
and still no tears
it was so cruel they said.

None had seen her
cry that day
he left and she stayed.

Same the next week
when she stood
before his grave and spoke.

Back again
one year later
and still no tears have fallen.

She dropped the rose
and turned her back
her eyes still dry, yet sad.

The others said
that she was heartless
never to have cried.

Even when
her husband left
without saying goodbye.

What they didn't
understand
was a promise that was made.

"When heaven calls
to one of us
both shall wait for time,

when heavan calls
the other one
together we shall be."

So even though
she looked so cold
not to cry for him.

Inside
she cried
and understood:

time will pass
and together
they will be.
©2008-2009 =lost-angle
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This poem: In Love, written 3 years ago

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